Promissum haiku

Quodcumque facis
Ibi tecum adero
Ubicumque vadis

Harry Wells

I am not too happy with my last line here because it has six syllables where it should have only five. In writing haiku the syllable count can be difficult. In a Latin haiku it’s even harder.
Can anybody improve this line without altering its meaning?
Harry Wells

Comments welcome

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  1. I am not too happy with my last line here because it has six syllableswhere it should have only five. In writing haiku the syllable count can be difficult. In Latin it’s even harder.
    Can anybody improve this line without altering its meaning?
    Harry Wells

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